This is one fantastic poem! I love it. Though its a "dark" poem. Keep writing! God bless.

m it's too chunky in some places that really pushes the rhythm back. i think it's a good idea tho. nice work!

you got some definite passion and your flow is excellent.

Wonderful, yet sad. You have a wonderful talent! Have you ever thought of getting 'em published?

Okay, the first stanza is SO CATCHY. I love it.. and the whole poem is just shockingly new, because how many people ask God NOT to forgive them? (At least in poetry.)

The flow is good, and your style (as in, I've read more than just this poem) is very interesting and new to me.

You have a very.. hmm, I don't know the word for it, but it's a really good thing.. outlook and perception. Your poetry is like taking the ordinary and flipping it inside-out to shock the crap out of your readers and to make them think in ways they didn't before.

I like it. And that's why you're going on my favourite authors list :)

Keep writing!

Beautifully written. Flows like a song. Keep writing please. You are such an inspiration.

different... but i enjoyed it

interesting. i don't think i've ever come across a poem like this before.

The emotion was protrayed well in this poem. Good job.

I thought this was great! I mean, there were spelling/grammatical errors that you need to fix, but other than that, really good- keep it up!

This is great and very well written. I loved it so much that I'm going to add it to my favorites. The only problem I had with it were the spelling errors. But other than that it was great.

dark88poet

Wow, so depressing this is, but so well written. Amazing. Keep writing!

~Anna~