First off, thank you for reading my story. It is greatly appreciated.

You have a nice descriptive ability, unlike most writer's on this site . . . including my own. That's a nice touch. I like how you have created this world and it is intereseting, especially at the end when you reveal that the world hated the alchemist.

Tia is a spunky little piece. She doesn't take 'no' for an answer very well. Oh well, it might have saved her life.

I like the tasks that each level of the school must do to get to the higher level. You have thought this out well, and I would think that Tia will be using her project a bit often in her new adventures.

nice job! i didn't no u liked 2 write. thats cool. It did have a bit of a Robert Jordan feel to it but thats cool to. You should at least continue the story if not finish it. It was good, i liked it.

hey, this story is pretty cool. hey, if u'r in2 alchemy so much, there's a show on cartoon network called Full Metal Alchemist. it's an awesome show. hey if this is what u like 2 write about, keep it up.

man do i like this story. it has to do with alchemy, which is cool. Emerald is a new Pokemon version game that came out in May. keep up the good work.

Very well written! And a good plot set up as well. It will be interesting to see how this plays out...