I like how it rhymes in story format.

sometimes i find repitition as a tool people use to sound cool but it doesnt really work with their piece. This is not the case with you though! Along with youre arrayment of words, intensity, and images this story really worked with the beginning repeating. Its just overflowing with brilliance! good job!

Wow. People are right--you are definitely a natural poet. This poem emanates a very powerful aura. When reading it, I can feel and imagine these dark, demon-like creatures of death and their ever-present existence. The rhythm of the poem flows wonderfully as well, almost accentuating the ominous presence of the creatures that seem to draw nearer and nearer with the progression of each stanza. Awesome work!

*Thanks for your review of my story (Divine Design) so far too. I appreciate it!

...Damn...this is like the best poem I have ever read. I loved the gruesome and detailed descriptions; dark and bloody...I liked the line 'the task of killing living things made gentle fingers feel like knives'...not sure why...Well once again AMAZING poem; I reread it 3 times...

wow, alex. this is awesome. i've forgotten how incredible your writing is.

excellent work.

wow, yes I agree, you should definetly send this poem in to that contest. This is one of your less confusing poems, Alex, which makes it easier to understand what you're saying. i like it

Wonderful, Kept my attention through the whole poem. Aye, I say! good things to the brilliant mind who is the author ^_^