That was amazing! I cant wait to read more! Will you R&R one of my stories?

Sad but oh so true, no one can stay on the fence forever. I liked the repetition and structure in this piece, and the uncertainty of the end. Nice work!

this was very well written, very sad. there were a lot of elipses and tho at first i liked the style, at first it got a wee bit distracting. just something i noticed. perhaps a few less?

~Mack

Wow, that's some deep stuff. I need to go through a reread to catch all of it. Beautiful piece of work here, just beautiful. Only problem I found was occasionally a lack of clarity (note paragraph four) that made it hard to understand. Paragraph four is where it's really confusing, might want to work on that one.

All the same, wonderful jobKhenna

P.S. Sorry about not responding to One Wish as much as I would have liked, been busy, I'll try to do some catching up this weekend.