Yay, suspense! Um...there were a few very minor spelling errors. Curling is probably curdling. Other than that, I can't wait for the next chapter. Whenever you get around to it.

I'm rather disturbed by the witch's hairy wart...(shudder). I thought you wrote this one out very well. The descriptions, especially the one of the witch, were very vivid and clear. I liked especially how you described the seat belt as "slithering" over the wary riders' belongings. Sorry, here comes the critique: You could have described the surroundings of the ride, like is it pitch black? What else can they discern in the darkness? I dunno, you're the writer. So keep writing! It's very good!Davey

Ah, funny stuff, funny stuff...Landing on top of a girl, legs apart, over hers, hand on her bosom...Im sure Zak must have liked that. That's probably why he had her move first. Haha, Zak, you pervert, you!...anyway. I liked it, but I have to be a little critical. You may have wanted to include some character descriptions and a few hints at their personalities. Just to paint the same, vivid picture in every readers' mind. I liked the descriptions and the language. I hope my suggestions help, though this isn't the kind of stuff I'm used to reading (and I don't read that much, either). A great story, though. Keep writing!Davey