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| xena 2005-11-23 ch 1,  | ok this has to be one of my favorites so far, I realize there are a few that i havent seen yet (I cant wait!) but this one kinda hold a special place in my heart cuz i remember the exact moment you felt inspired to write it, it was late, i was on the phone n i said something that triggered the first verse in your head! i'm glad i could help :) love u mwah |
| jo 2005-10-10 ch 1, | I loved the part you said:" everytime i hear your voiceit sends shivers down my spineit's like gidance to my lost soulan unchained melody to my broken heart very nice indeed...and i feel that some of the phrases are titles of songs...interesting ;) loved it. jo |
| Remnants 2005-09-26 ch 1,  | really great. i really emagined how it must be to fall in love, actually, this poem inspires me to write something. thanx 4 that! man a really cool love poem |
| loudly-unheard 2005-09-08 ch 1, | not one of ur best ,, but lovely still |
| The Love Demi Goddess 2005-08-19 ch 1, | Beautiful. I like the lines "everytime I hear your voice/It sends shivers down my spine/it's like a guidance to my lost soul." beautifully discribed! really. Very nice, lovey poem. You can feel the passion in it. You ended it nicely as well. for punctuation, I would reccomend you write "with you, baby, I know I'm home." kind of like a dramatic pause, you know? write hard, write long, write until dawn~ TLDG |
| Accalia Aeryn 2005-07-12 ch 1, | This is a very nice poem. One suggestion though, maybe put it into stanzas. That's a nit-picky thing though. Never mind... Great writing anyway! |
| sinnerbynature 2005-07-12 ch 1, | Lol..it's a crush u have there not love :Pit's adorable..i think its the kinda poem when u read after 20 years u'll just smile! that's what i did. it's great ;)keep it up . |
| Sunami Silverblade 2005-07-08 ch 1, | Aww... I can see how much of your heart and soul must've gone into this piece. It's just beautiful, even in its simplicity. Such a lovely poem! You obviously love this person very much, and they must mean the world to you. ^_^ This poem just makes me happy--it's so sweet! Nice job. --Sunami Silverblade |
| Cloud Burst 2005-07-08 ch 1, | very deep and heartfelt. beautiful =) |
| origamikitty 2005-07-08 ch 1, | Very sweet =) |
| Ellin Louise 2005-07-08 ch 1, | I'ts nice, sweet. it sounds like a song. Simple, like there aren't really words to show the true emotion, so just keep it simple... it works. |