This poem is really great! It's sort of mysterious in a way, and really makes you think. I like your style.

Very nice. Really deep. I love the flow in it.

lovin the last line- 'let go, before i do.'

there's a part i don't understand-

I hope you know you look you stare like that,across the room;like you're being watched. are they staring across the room because they are watched? or is the reader SUPPOSED to feel watched?

right - just love this. i know i say that about everything you write but it's sorta true P the desperation in this lies in its simplicity. makes me think of Mslash even though err you didn't say. dungeon thing obvious here. reminds me of thoughts without words though i don't know why

wicked, i love it. it captures so much really wonderful- love the ending lines.

This is wonderful, i love the last line. really ends the piece, you know?

I like this, it sounds like somthing that someone would have written to me a couple of years ago, not that I'm proud of it or anything, but the truth burns and scathes and all we can do is live with it. Good things, S.P.

powerful and well written... awesome poem

The mental pictures that it brings up are lovely. I know what you mean about the mixed opinions, but it's fine, no worries. Good job, as always. You expert, you. ;)

oh i like this! ah i have nothing smart to say i'm dizzy and uninspired but seriously you're a great writer so keep writing :D :D :D :D :D

oh claire! beautiful! i love it!

It shows a lot through movement and touch, I like that.

I haven't read something this good on this site in a while! I love it! Never stop writing!

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i like it! seems very...hectic, in a subtle way. nicely done!

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