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| LiLFroglette 2005-09-03 ch 1, | abuseThis poem is really great! It's sort of mysterious in a way, and really makes you think. I like your style. |
| Moonjava 2005-08-19 ch 1, | abuseVery nice. Really deep. I love the flow in it. |
| vonlan 2005-08-17 ch 1, | abuselovin the last line- 'let go, before i do.' there's a part i don't understand- I hope you know you look manic.when you stare like that,across the room;like you're being watched. < are they staring across the room because they are watched? or is the reader SUPPOSED to feel watched? |
| kalmia raphael 2005-08-17 ch 1, | abuseright - just love this. i know i say that about everything you write but it's sorta true = P the desperation in this lies in its simplicity. makes me think of Mslash even though err you didn't say. dungeon thing obvious here. reminds me of thoughts without words though i don't know why |
| citrus scented 2005-08-06 ch 1, | abusewicked, i love it. it captures so much really wonderful- love the ending lines. |
| cynicaldays 2005-07-29 ch 1, | abuseThis is wonderful, i love the last line. really ends the piece, you know? |
| The Melissa Occult 2005-07-20 ch 1, | abuseI like this, it sounds like somthing that someone would have written to me a couple of years ago, not that I'm proud of it or anything, but the truth burns and scathes and all we can do is live with it. Good things, S.P. |
| simpleplan13 2005-07-18 ch 1, | abusepowerful and well written... awesome poem |
| TwystedFate 2005-07-09 ch 1, | abuseThe mental pictures that it brings up are lovely. I know what you mean about the mixed opinions, but it's fine, no worries. Good job, as always. You expert, you. ;) |
| Made in U.S.A. 2005-07-09 ch 1, | abuseoh i like this! ah i have nothing smart to say i'm dizzy and uninspired but seriously you're a great writer so keep writing :D :D :D :D :D |
| Kristina 2005-07-09 ch 1, anon. | abuseoh claire! beautiful!! i love it!! |
| Nobody-n-Particular 2005-07-09 ch 1, | abuseIt shows a lot through movement and touch, I like that. |
| xoxkissxofxdeathxox 2005-07-09 ch 1, | abuseI haven't read something this good on this site in a while! I love it! Never stop writing! XOXkissXofXdeathXOX |
| lackluster 2005-07-09 ch 1, | abusei like it! seems very...hectic, in a subtle way. nicely done! ~tuesday |