|Reviews for Red Dust|
| the naked civil servant 3/1/06 . chapter 1
the first line knocked me sideways. from there it was a crescendo of beauty right up to the last defiant desperate helpless last line. gorgeous.
| vonlan 8/17/05 . chapter 1
sounds like somebody got hurt on a rainy day.
it makes me think of a scene, of a picture frame smashing into a puddle of water and this is the tableaux-
someone's got tears streaming down their face in the rain, its blended and you can't tell.
i am quite the oddity.
| kalmia raphael 8/17/05 . chapter 1
short again but good. love the stylistic thingies here, the off-rhyming and the alliteration, and also more unconventional slashes, italics etc. ending line really strikes home. accident - media playout of the accident is nothing like the reality. at least that's my idea. don't fully understand this poem but it is morbidly pretty.
| til-iburnout aka Amanda Helton 8/14/05 . chapter 1
You sure know how to drag a person in with the opening lines. I loved it.
| citrus scented 8/12/05 . chapter 1
i adore the opening lines, they are just so strong and effective- they really reel you in. incredible poem, really celevrly written.
| in theory 8/8/05 . chapter 1
Wow, very creative clur. Not spoken to you for awhile, hope you're doing good. )
| Cloud Burst 8/7/05 . chapter 1
very abstract and creative, beautiful.
| AboveTheSalt 8/6/05 . chapter 1
You chose very strong words; there is nothing light about this poem. Its brevity certainly adds to the cutting, emotional/instinctual feel. The colors and images you chose are incredibly striking - red dust, water full blast, screen flickers green, blackout. Definitely enjoyed this one.
| Moonjava 7/31/05 . chapter 1
The imagery in this is just great. Nice work.
| The Melissa Occult 7/20/05 . chapter 1
| simpleplan13 7/18/05 . chapter 1
wow.. insanely powerful... awesome awesome poem.. i love the first line of the middle stanza
| Escapist 7/14/05 . chapter 1
The impact of the first line is staggering, because GODDAMN: it takes a lot to smash Polaroid prints to smithers. The rest of the poem rolls off of that, your diction being just so strikingly appealing.
| Kira Deleria 7/9/05 . chapter 1
This is an awsome poem. I love the imagry of the first 2 lines and the way you wrote the poem is interesting. The poem itself is moving and interesting, I liked it. Great work.
| lackluster 7/9/05 . chapter 1
sad...love the last line particularly!
| TwystedFate 7/9/05 . chapter 1
Love the last line particularly. Lovely, as always.