the first line knocked me sideways. from there it was a crescendo of beauty right up to the last defiant desperate helpless last line. gorgeous.

sounds like somebody got hurt on a rainy day.

it makes me think of a scene, of a picture frame smashing into a puddle of water and this is the tableaux-

then flash-

someone's got tears streaming down their face in the rain, its blended and you can't tell.

i am quite the oddity.

short again but good. love the stylistic thingies here, the off-rhyming and the alliteration, and also more unconventional slashes, italics etc. ending line really strikes home. accident - media playout of the accident is nothing like the reality. at least that's my idea. don't fully understand this poem but it is morbidly pretty.

You sure know how to drag a person in with the opening lines. I loved it.

i adore the opening lines, they are just so strong and effective- they really reel you in. incredible poem, really celevrly written.

Wow, very creative clur. Not spoken to you for awhile, hope you're doing good. )

very abstract and creative, beautiful.

You chose very strong words; there is nothing light about this poem. Its brevity certainly adds to the cutting, emotional/instinctual feel. The colors and images you chose are incredibly striking - red dust, water full blast, screen flickers green, blackout. Definitely enjoyed this one.

The imagery in this is just great. Nice work.

Interesting enough.

wow.. insanely powerful... awesome awesome poem.. i love the first line of the middle stanza

The impact of the first line is staggering, because GODDAMN: it takes a lot to smash Polaroid prints to smithers. The rest of the poem rolls off of that, your diction being just so strikingly appealing.

This is an awsome poem. I love the imagry of the first 2 lines and the way you wrote the poem is interesting. The poem itself is moving and interesting, I liked it. Great work.

sad...love the last line particularly!

Love the last line particularly. Lovely, as always.