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| E.S. Lundgren 2006-04-03 ch 1,   | your word choice really shines through on this, i'm very impressed. this was formated interisingly as well. creative! |
| Tears-for-Mary 2005-08-12 ch 1, | flow of thoughts? wow.brilliantly abstract. |
| batang makata 2005-08-05 ch 1, | this is so cool! |
| cynicaldays 2005-07-30 ch 1, | Heh, Sail away with an open mind. I had to read this one twice two, because on the first read i forgot i was reading about thoughts and not just normal paper. One long complicated simile. wonderful. |
| Sorrowful Dreams 2005-07-24 ch 1, | very nicely written. the ending was the best of it all. I loved it and it stuck out alot. In a way very sad and touching.. ~Sorrow~ |
| fragglerock 2005-07-13 ch 1, | This is AWESOME! |
| Munchin 2005-07-11 ch 1, | that is neat. I also like how you wrote it.. the set up looks interesting |
| FunkyFlower17 2005-07-11 ch 1, | great poem! very gentle with a very perfect ending. wonderful vocab and outstanding imagery. well done! |
| underminingfaith 2005-07-10 ch 1, | gentle, and I like the ending. I keep thinking that there's more meaning to this poem than just origami, but I can't pick it out - is there? |
| Nobody-n-Particular 2005-07-10 ch 1, | The movement is great and the imagery is gentle. |
| Aquafied 2005-07-10 ch 1, | beautiful, you dont read many poems about origami. with alternate meanings of course. it seems like the paper boat, will just sail away... |
| lackluster 2005-07-10 ch 1, | love the format, it's very diffeent, which is a good thing. the symbolism is just great also. lovely!^__^ ~tuesday |
| silene.nocturna 2005-07-10 ch 1, | i found the layout really refreshing because it's rare when one can use dashes in that style whilst actually making sense. i loved it =] and the imagery is excellent too |
| Soulshifter 2005-07-10 ch 1, | Interesting piece, I like the constant dashes to distinguish the lines. Also, I like how you go into detail with the folding and such. It's nice, I but I wouldn't mind seeing the improved version. |
| Skylar Rose 2005-07-10 ch 1, | Very nice symbolism and very well described. I loved this piece :-) Wonderful write! ~Skylar Rose |