Lalalalalalalalalalalalala I love it!! This is absolutely one of my favorite stories on this site. But, I do have to critisize some of it, so here it is.

The first thing I really noticed was your grammar. I forget now, but there were some places where your verbs, or adjectives, and whatnot, were in the wrong places and it didn't make sense.

Next, there's commas. You don't use enough commas. Don't be afraid of them!! Commas can be your friend. They tend to be my enemy,though.

Now, we have the formalities. In the beginning, Sasaki Sakura called her son Zen-kun. She should just call him Zen, since they are family, and I was sort of proud that you corrected this later on in the chapter.

There were some spelling mistakes, and those are simple to fix. Remember to proofread!! Always proofread. Man, I need to listen to my own advice. Um, I saw that you kept using then instead of than and were instead of where. This happened a lot, so I thought I should point it out.

I was also a little confused on Zen and Sakura's surname. Was it Sasaki or Sasashi?? I saw both names used more than once, so you need to fix that.

Oh, one more thing about formalities. If Hoshi is much younger than Hana, she should call him Hoshi-boku, which means child or squirt. I think that's it.

And this story seems to remind me of Furuba, or Fruits Basket. But it is so much different. I love it. UPDATE SOON!

I love it! New chapter! New chapter!Update soon!That makes me think...is Sumi the Phoenix's heir? Maybe.

Anyway, don't be afraid to use page breaks or something. You have six main characters at the moment and you keep switching from one to the other. Put something there to let us know we're changing the setting and the character.