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Reviews For: Giving Into Temptation

outsidersgirl
2008-01-11
ch 1,
abusethis is good
Harumi Satoshi
2005-07-18
ch 1,
abuseI have just one question: do you plan on adding to the 3 stories you have started? They all have only 1 or 2 chapters, so I was just curious.
Voxy
2005-07-13
ch 1,
abuseVery sweet... Only I feel likeI'm waiting for more of the story. As if it's not concluded. ... The only thing I'm wondering about is why he refers to her as "Lee", but in descriptive form, you have it written as "Leah"
tiggershan87
2005-07-12
ch 1,
abusegreat start and very interresting keep it up.
FallingStarz
2005-07-12
ch 1, anon.
abuseIt's a cute story! It was enjoyable to read. Keep up the good writing!
KaiaLeigh
2005-07-10
ch 1,
abuseI like it, you should write more.
lucia marin
2005-07-10
ch 1, anon.
abusenot logged in, but thanks for the review, and you really can write romance. i can totally see you kicking nora roberts ** in the future. keep at it.
Osunale
2005-07-10
ch 1,
abuseVery nice story, fitting perfectly with the title and perfectly adjusted to the characters. The dialogue, people, and words seem to belong and flow smoothly with each other.

"she looked up and neither of them said nothing" This has the effect of a double negative...watch that! Also, be careful of those plain over-stated phrases like "the emotional closeness between them was intense" which does very little to obtain interest.

Overall, rather beautiful though. You have a dazzling way with words.
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