This does not sound like something you would write, but good nonetheless.

Wow...that was absolutely incredible. Symbolically, themetically beautiful with equally as great diction. Incredible job.

Well, This is so totally awesome..I really loved it!This is thinking outside the box and your grammar is alot better. Once again this is very impressive,the details very well thought of!Amazing!B.T.W(have you done any vampire stories yet,just wondering?)

It's very dark. I like the way you discribed what was going around. How you made your reader see the colors was beautiful. It's interesting that you should say "Dignity" is her father and the small part he plays in leading her away. It's a very interesting and attention keeping poem. Good job!

God bless, Lakoria

so deep and descriptive...