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| iknowthethirdthingaboutpoet... 2006-03-12 ch 5,  | abuseDon't know if you did it on purpose, but I think you got the number of the syllables wrong. My favorites are the ones with the cat and the **. |
| Diana Shore 2005-07-21 ch 3, | abusecould still have the same impact and be in the correct format like so: My heart swelled seeingmy kid smiling until Icaught the stench of pot Take care, D. |
| Diana Shore 2005-07-21 ch 5, | abuseHaikus are about nature, so this would be considered a Senryu. I know this site does not have a poetry sub-category of Senryu, but you could put in your summary that it's a Senryu. Also, while you are getting the hang of writing a Senryu or a Haiku you should stick to the 5-7-5 syllable format. I know "technically" it doesn't have to be in this format as long as its 17 syllables long, but most people are more comfortable sticking with and reading the 5-7-5 format. Yours, however, doesn't qualify in either standard. You've got a 5-5-6 syllable format with total of only 16 syllables. This was funny, though. Take care, D. |
| Nobody-n-Particular 2005-07-19 ch 5, | abuseFunness. |
| a magadalene romance 2005-07-19 ch 1, | abusetis crap. doesn't actually have a point (or even a sub-point) also you're a rubbish tolkien fan. |
| Nobody-n-Particular 2005-07-11 ch 4, | abuseInteresting collection here. |
| Nobody-n-Particular 2005-07-11 ch 3, | abuseSo frustrated. |
| Nobody-n-Particular 2005-07-11 ch 2, | abuseHey that is horrible. |
| Nobody-n-Particular 2005-07-11 ch 1, | abuseVery direct. |
| Osunale 2005-07-11 ch 4, | abuseThese remind me of the strange way that being punched in the stomach can make a person laugh. Come out very honest, and right-true to life. |
| fontanellemonster 2005-07-11 ch 2, | abuseheh "feel bump behind me" is jokes. but its the wrong syllabic formation i think? |