well golly gee willikers mister, that was some kinda poetry there! my favorite is this line.

With it I dart and jab like Olympian lances.

jab, boy, jab! haha

Yay for other poetry smut writers! You remind me of myself, it makes me happy. So does this poem. Detail is.. lovely.

Now I feel all embarassed and dirty. Erotic poems do that to me. Ah well. At least it was writing well (very well). I'm suprised this hasn't been removed yet. But yeah, it was very well written.

zzCheerSzz

I really really like it. Write more please.

Oh no. I think I'm jealous now. Excellent rhyming and beautiful imagery. Who wouldn't be jealous? Besides, if it makes you hot it's a good poem and or story. Love this poem.

-Alexiel

Nice. Cool. Hah, it's really good. Sorry for sounding like an idiot but I can never type good reviews. Anyway, it's a nice, dirty poem. haha. Keep up the good work

Chobi

PS. I updated Take me With You Forever, in case you wated to know.

i don't really feel like signing in, or beginning sentences with capitol letters. nice, dirty poem. it made me feel like a dirty girl. everyone loves a good head job. later dogg. hehe. -silence

erotic and beautiful, sensual imagery.

Shavo

This was interesting and very good.

That's...hot. *sigh* whew!

Good writing. I don't know many people who can write a good rhyming poem but you really pulled it off! Good job!

perfectly lovely...delicious

Sweet poem! One of my faves.

good poem. as usual. artistically descriptive and totally dyke rae

Ha, that was great! you are so outstandingly sick in the mind, it goes beyond insanity to brillancy. I must say, that is good work. You're so mindset aganist your poems, but they are really good.

Wow, that was pretty good. ; Its almost like a song and such. It flows nice. XP