This poem exudes so much desperation, or maybe lack of hope. It's conveyed really well- and at the same time it's abstract, almost hazy (in a good way).

I was amazed by the way you managed to hold your rhyme scheme without making it seem overdone and breaking the flow.

"On fragile wings of wasted sighs" is so beautiful, and delicate- love this line.

This is beautiful! I actually read this twice, just for the sake of reading it over again. :/ *is a loser*

Anyhow, I agree, I think this is one of your best pieces. I really like the rhyme scheme, and the imagery is really detailed and evocative. Awesome job!

bravo. That's an amazing dreamy depressing poem. I'm really liking it. What can you say? I've always been writin angsy like this without even realizing it intill now. And now I follow that feeling for yrs wanted to come to action. Great.~Colette