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| ADSpencer 2006-12-16 ch 5,  | abuseGood story. Could have been way longer though. Nice ending! |
| ADSpencer 2006-12-16 ch 2, | abuseA few grammatical errors but I really liked this chapter. Nicely done. Super heroes rock (DC fan here)--as do the villains...Anyhow, good job. |
| ADSpencer 2006-12-16 ch 1, | abuseInteresting beginning. I like it. However, one little thing--I think that the secondary characters are almost too flat. Giving them a name, or even a nickname, wouldn't be a bad idea. Describing, for example, the thieves by their hair is rather vague--a name would give them more essense. Anyhow, just a suggestion. |