This is really good. a poem of hope is what it makes me think of. i have no clue if this was your intention. But eaither way i like it

Beautiful, you *should* like it. Amazing ending, so !

this is incredible. the imagery and descriptions almost overwelming, real quality of writing. i espeacilly love: "bleached white like sun-dried sun-kissed bones" chilling, haunting and thoughtprovoking. love it.

Personally professional. I like it. 'bleached white like sun-dried sun-kissed bones.' is a strong image. 'scored by gunfire,' I like too.

Absolutely stunning piece. Terrific imagery and atmosphere. I love your repetition and rhythm. Awesome!

Fantastic descriptions in this. I love the line "(no phoenix rising for this city of ashes)".