I LOVE IT!! PLEASE UPDATE SOON!! I CAN'T WAIT!

Heh, that's a very funny chapter. I loved it! It figures that those two would get paired up.

I can't wait to see the whole reason why she dislikes him so much. Hope to see more. ^_^

Odd tense issues but otherwise I like this. It is clever how you work songs and movies to relate to this and then make it a part of your story. So I can't praise you enough for that. Ryan continues to be annoying- so his character is staying constant. I wish I could enter your story and do the whole movie thing but oh well. Haven't seen Anastasia but I would like to so I can have a insight into Anya. I am thinking that maybe Ryan and Adrianna are going to have to belovers or something but I don't know. I am happy to hear that you are going to explain more why she hates me later on and explain why she is like her character, Anya. I'll be reading chapter 3. Luv Kaitx

Hey. I liked the song and it tied into her emotions. I would have liked it if maybe you could have put in a bit more of their past at the beginning. Maybe a flashback or something? But you are probably going to work their history in slowly throughout the chapters which is also good. The line Ryan said about everybody loving him was annoying and made me want to get violent. But that is good because you nailed his character perfectly in that one line. He really is conceited. Overall this has potential and I am reading on. Luv Kaitx

Very cute so far. Keep up the good work. and I love that song.

i totally luv ur story ms dude!1 real kol! And how come i cant post any? and its already 6:17 and its the 14th? help me! i luv ur story so far!!but please work on the other one, secret star!11

"Not much of a surprise, considering he was/am the typical" -- was/is

ryan seems a bit over the top...the: "Ryan glared. “I’m not a bore! In fact I can ruin your perfect life if I want to! Not to mention almost every female in the world loves me!”" just felt really random, and her positive reaction "but not managing to hide her proud goofy smile."/"Adriana giggled, teasing." dunno, but the way you set her up, she seemed to be inclined to act horrified/ withdrawn

nice story, but i likethe secret star!1 keep writing the othe rones 4 heavens sake dude

You had some tense issues, as well as some subjet/verb agreement problems- and wha were those words in bold that kept appearing during the last part of hte story? I'm guessing that they're lyrics to a song, and I suggest you remove them so the reader can focus on the story at hand without having the prose interrupted by random lyrics. If you feel like you must keep them, but them at the beginning or the end so they don't interrupt the flow.