beautiful, i loved it. the descriptive-ness of it all was so great that i could actual visualise the setting. was this in the eyes of a little girl? because as i read, it was as if i was in the body of a little girl, looking about herself and just preparing for what happens next. i'm not sure if this is a one-shot, but if it is... it was great. but if it's not... then i can't wait to read more.

speaking of which... i haven't seen an update in souzouryouku: creative forces in a while and i was wondering what happened, so i checked out your profile and was caught up with this. i loved it so much that i had to take me time just review... it was worth it. so i'll review next time.

-tii jay

err...well...It's good but there are some parts that just confuse me. THere seem to be some...well...some sentences taht just kind of trail off without explaining...Maybe its what you intended but its a bit hard for me to undeerstand whats happening