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| cursed-x-oblivion 2006-02-03 ch 2,  | abusevery funny chapter. can't wait for the next one. hopefully it will come out soon. :) |
| Emmi 2005-09-30 ch 2, anon. | abusethis story has a really good plot so I dunno why this story doesn't have more reviews! please please PLEASE Update this *pouts* please? heheh anyways keep on writing...-Emmi |
| jamie- anne 2005-08-25 ch 1, anon. | abuseI really like your beginning. I like the thought of how she is stuck with a guy whom she doesn't like. I really think you are a great writer... absolutly! Just a minor question; you hadn't discribe Nathen and Serena appearance... Are they handsome or beautiful; are they cute or pretty? Explain what they are like, as in looks. I wanna encourage you to write more. |
| littleXember 2005-08-21 ch 2, | abusecool story! me like...if its okay, can you describe nathan's features?? he sounds hott though :) lol. features as in how does he look punkish/gothish/preppy. ya. great story again keep updating! :) |
| Sailor Bleu 2005-08-03 ch 2, | abusehey there! Okay, so I think you got a pretty good start. =] I have some suggestions though. 1. Sometimes it's hard for me to understand who is talking because you a)merge the dialogue together or b) you leave the dialogue without a name after it too much. With b, it's okay to do that you know like "hi" said serena"hi" he said back."do you like brocolli?""no i don't""why not?" she queried. lmao that's a stupid example I made up there but see what I mean? =] 2) don't worry about offending someone when you're writing. If you think you might say something that someone could take the wrong way, make an author's note at the beginning saying something like "things in this story may or may not be the author's beliefs and are not meant to offend anyone" yadda yadda. Something like that. So then you don't have to add a/n throughout the whole story if you write something. But anyhoo... sorry if none of that made sense. I tried haha. But I really liked the second chapter. It was pretty funny. =] Can't wait to read more! |
| SwEeTaNgElZ143 2005-07-13 ch 1, | abusegreat first chapter... but i got kind of confused on some of the paragraphs cuz i couldn't tell who was speaking when...but other than that it was great... update soon. |
| cAnDYmoNStEr32 2005-07-13 ch 1, | abuseThat was hilarious.. update soon! |