this is my fav personally...nice topic and ending. the rymes were reeli cool.

-aLLy of CaLi

you know, even the first time i read this when i wasn't paying all that much attention it touched me...i felt this chill in my stomach...and i got an idea. i'll mail you.

-mariax

ps. it rocked, just in case u didnt geddit lol

ooh, this is kind of haunting and pretty all at once! i love all the imagarey (sp?) it just makes it so much more...i dunno, AWESOME. not entirely sure what it's about (suicide? that's my guess...) but i love it anyways. good job!

...wow...

I like this. Parts of it seemed really hectic, which I thought was awesome. Great poem. My favourite lines were "A cut too deep

The eternal sleep

Lighted fliers, crystal angels

Carry me away

Among the clouds

To dawn’s bright dancing crimson walls" Good job!

the ending is kinda abrupt but i luv the middle parts of imagery. excellent descriptions and great flow! awesome poem!