Very nice ^_^ You do write very well, despite what you think, Ash-chan. I really liked the imagery in the chorus, about the pieces falling away. It's very poignant. Hope I spelled that right... :P

This past school year, one of my good friends formed a support group called Cutters Anonymous as part of her senior project on self mutilation (she used to SM.) I know that one of the things she tried to get the group to do was to find something else to do when they felt like cutting--something constructive that could take the place of the destructive, and I think you've got it here. I know writing helps me get out things when I'm angry, and you do it very eloquently, I think : ) I look forward to reading more of your stuff, and hope that things get better for ya, hun *hugs*

WOAH. I like this one. Im taking the first line from chorus and putting it for my friend's page! That's so cool!

P.S- I think you write better songies.

Hey, I really, really liked that, Ash-chan. Seriously, it was really good. It just seemed to be a little too short for a song. You should add to it.

Awesome one. Luv ya, hun!

P.S.- If you don't know who this is, I'll have to hurt you.

Hi Ash-chan, it's been awhile. Too long since we chatted. As always, I'm impressed with how you've grown lyrically since I've met you. You're right, it's short, but I think it's fine. I think you should get started on putting together melodies and instrumentation for you song. This one is good in a melancholy, morbid, and creative way. See ya around, Ash-chan!With love, Tatianna Blusummers.

I like it. It is short, but it sounds really good. Love you, Ash-chan. :)

This was amazing. So emotional and perfect.

Interesting Ash. Yeah It is a little short but i still like it. definetly can`t wait to see more. So nice job, keep writing. Bi.