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Reviews For: Pride

YukinkoMisa 2005-12-15 ch 1,	abuse. . . :blinks:um...yeah...:laughs softly: well anyways, again, wondeful description and feeling. I liked the reality and bitterness. Btw, I think you should post your poems! They are so good, and they deserve to be flaunted! ~Kat
aiur 2005-08-10 ch 1,	abusehey! okay, so you wrote this a while ago, but as you know i've been gone stuck in french mud up to my chest so i haven't been able to read it. but when i began to, i was so delighted. i love how you can write about this view of life, the bitter side to love, how you strike out at fairy-tales and belief. too many people, i find, shy away from the bleaker, darker, side of life in writing. and then when they do write about it, it becomes almost like a cliché, an experiment, an excuse. it's not REAL. but you make it real. never mind your stories combine crazy far-fetched elements from imagination alone - you - make - it - real. i loved reading this, because you wrote it as yourself, and i love, love, love your style. on top of that, the narrator - even though it was obvious from the start what she was going to do to james (for me, a tad too obvious) - i still couldn't hate her. i loved her. and even though this is a fanfic and it didn't match life at all, there was still so much to take away from it about life. that said, i think you need to end it instead of just cutting it off there (though that could have been some loading error instead because you're no amateur), and i have noticed some of your dialogue isn't punctuated correctly. i.e. - "And you love me." he cut - there should be a comma used in place of the period. it's in your other story, too, i just never commented. it really doesn't matter. your writing lifts it beyond the matter of dialogue punctuation. and i rather think you shouldn't mention at the beginning about the Gryffindor Pride competition thing. i mean - this isn't a fanfic site, and you've changed this fic and spun it away from that, but i automatically made the connection and i think it made me read the story totally differently. i think it would be neat, to see how people would read something written for one thing in a totally unrelated light. but yes. i loved reading this. it was an awesome length. and, God, your summary. haha i would curse you for it if i could. it was beautiful. i love it. love it for everything it touches, related to the actual story or not. so thank you, dear, for once again walking down into the shadows just to paint the picture for those of us who would follow but are too scared to do it on our own. =) great job. ~k8
sketchingaCYNiC 2005-07-19 ch 1,	abusegreat story. i mean, i'll admit.. i hoped for a good ending, but the beginning didn't allow that. amazing story, though.
Dr. Pepper 14 2005-07-17 ch 1,	abuseThis is really great! I'm adding it to my favorites so I can read it again. It's sad though, but I totally agree with you. Life isn't fair. Life doesn't always have a happy ending. This is a perfect bittersweet tale. A part of me still hopes that she and James would have had a happy ending though. Blame it on my human sentiment. Ciao.
D'quer Jyi-Weil 2005-07-15 ch 1,	abuseWow. Wow. Wow. THAT was AMAZING! Really great. I would con/crit, but there's nothing to change. THe hardness of it all it just amazing...amazing.

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