Another one I love. I really like the chorus, too. And the line "bleeding through chain-linked dreams" makes a nice image.

Jenn

Sheesh...I am once again at a loss of words. That's awesome point and everything.

That was emotional and well written. I enjoyed the emotions in it.

I like this, awesome work!

Very good, but I don't really follow the rhythm that well. Perhaps it's just me, but it seemed in the verses and the bridge your rhythm was a tad off. Also I saw rhyme in the 2nd verse down, but none in the first verse. It needs to remain consistent. If it were a poem, I would critique it further, but this is a song, which really is poetry set to music. It's quite good, really. It just needs a few touch ups.