that was an amazing story i hope you get to finish it. it was really well written and it keep me courious and wanting to keep reading i hope you keep adding on cause this story is the best ever read and im not lieing.

hm... Well, I 'like the chapters with Spencer in it (cause he's my goth/emo guy haha), but I'm half in half about the chapter 5 and up stuff other than that. :D Either way, I think I'll like it.

See ya at school Hope. *wink wink* lol. bye bye.

by the way. K.K. Bennett if like effing awesome. I didn't even notice before, but that's cooler than C.L. Tadlock. Even though I like my C.L. Tadlock. hehe. EEK! I just wrote my last name down! Someone's going to come kidnapp me now, and say they found me from fictionpress. LMAO. Sorry, I'm sick and crazy at the moment. EK! I just wrote a really stupid review. lol. *hits head against wall repeatedly* I'm just going to press submit before I go off and start just hitting keys. lol. bye bye.

You're such a tease! lol. i saw this and thought it was an update. :D but that's okay, at least it shows you're still alive... well, okay, i see you almost everyday now but what ever. lol. soo update as soon as your little computer lets ya! :D

-Christin-Turdlock-

please update soon!

dang. okay. it's been a while since you updated but no problem. i was just reading this over and i thought "hey i'll review again"

so now i'll review! hehe! i really like this ALOT it seems really good and i like her powers.

okay "Hope" i'll end this with a have a nice day! :D lol

oh yeah. i also had to review this because i had forgot to put it on my favorite list and i have gone over the limit but if i review and do it, it will let me. :D lol

A few spelling mistakes... "Of coarse...-Of course"Though guy..."-Tough guy

Oh, and when Alice is thinking you should maybe Italic that or make the font different so that we know she's saying this in her head and not out loud.-Chris

I was reading this over an I found a few mistakes and confusing sentences...

"They was jars very where."

-There were jars everywhere.

"... they are going to make you prefect!"

-they are going to make you perfect.

"She could always tell when he had that icy cold smile on his face, when he wore it."

-You really don't need, 'when he wore it' because the words before pretty much state that.

"Most of them were filled with slimy stuff of every color imaginable, or close to it."

-Instead of 'stuff' maybe put strange substance or unidentified liquid. Also I don't think you need to have 'or close to it' because if the slimy things are every color possible that already has us thinking of all different colors.

"On the walls was all kinds of hypodermis needles some used and some looked brand new."

-First thing, check on your point of view; you keep changing it from present tense (was, are) to past tense (were). Try to keep it the same, it helps the story flow.-Second, I think you missed a word, "needles some used and some looked brand new." I think you missed 'looked in between some and used.

-Use words instead of numbers - more professional

-Smiles or smiled?

-The story is awesome! I'm not denying that, but every story, even mine, will have mistakes. Go over mine if you want to, I'd appreciate it!-Chris

it's great!love the whole eye color thing and the powers freakin cool. i love the cars.effin' A

Neat! I can already guess at a few things that may come in the near future, involving Spencer... maybe?lol nice job

This chapter confused me. But it was still good update soon!

Oh very tense. I like stan he's cool in a scary way. BUt hey thats just me sick and twisted mind.

Yea i'll review here. Very good chapter. I like how the diolouge flowed well with charecters and it was realistic.

Ew, kinda... disgusting, but great. Great since of horror (I screamed when they injected her, not seriously but watever) Very good!

WOW! I wish i could pick up girls like that... nice car by the way. Its really good. I would love a review from an author of your caliber on my story "Of Light and Dark" Thanks and keep up the good work. All I have to say, is I would like to learn more about Alice's past!

First chapter:

Alright, good start. I have already told you that, hehe. Anyway, I saw a coulpe mistakes in grammar..but what you really need help on are your dialogue. It doesn't seem natural for some reason. I know this is like a Private school, but that doesn't mean everyone speaks in perfect grammar. This is something I myself am learning, and it's something you need to learn as well. How would I fix it? First, I would pay attention to when you talk to your friends and adults. Listen to how they form their words. Read other novels and see how writers do dialogue. And put it all together, and come up with a unique and exciting dialogue for us readers.

BTW, I can see your personality in some of the dialogue. And thats great. Add's realism to it.

Good job. Review rest later.