I think the end result was very worth while. it's amazing how much i can relate to this as well. with very different reasons I'm sure. The universal archetype of the war within ourselves. beautifulMel

Great. I love the structure.

I find this poem is honest, and has a good lead up to the end. I like the ending, it makes you wonder what happened in the end. I'm going to try to read all of your work - they're great!

ooh...i like it. very descriptive.

very powerful and the message is strong. awesome work!

I don't know why you thought this was bad, it's really amazing - you have a way with words... I'm definitely going to read some more of your poems.

Ironic that lions only reley on their sharp fangs and large size to scare off ememnies.

But, either way, is a very deep poem. I enjoyed it throughly. _

That's interesting and...AWESOME! he he It really is.

Very good. The rhythm flows well together and the rhyme is easy enough to find. But you really need to start seperating your stanzas into groups to make it a little easier to understand.

oh! I really rather enjoyed this one...

I absolutely love this. The way the words just flow along and seemingly wrap around the reader... sigh :)

I feel that way alot... nicely written.