Okay, just because you warned us against us, I HAD to try reading it aloud with a lisp. I laughed out loud.

Then I went back and read it again, and fell in love. You're one for the favorites, Escapist! Your way with words (and creative use of formatting to emphasis it) are stunning. Brava!

~the girl in the cafe

oh my god that is so beautiful.

he's stammeringhe's stammeringhe's stammering HEY BABYi don't know any of you anymore.

the last stanza is so evocative and lonely and beautiful and quiet and sad.

I have a lisp with my retainer in and I just had to read it aloud. It was amusing hearing myself.

On a different note, I love this poem. You really are talented.

I love the repeat of "I don't know any of you anymore"- and the alliteration was a great effect.

As with all of your work, I love it. The one thing I love the most about your work is your word choice and your structure - it just flows beautifully. Keep it coming.

Just letting you know that I've drifted back on to fictionpress and just recently posted some new stuff...I'd love if you read it and let me know what you think.

Keep writing. :)

Personally I can identify with several lines of this: "I don't know any of you anymore." Honestly all of my freinds from years ago are so far from who I am, I have to wonder what we saw in each other. And then the last line about the anxious girl; that is a jewel of comparison, I'm twenty years old but I still get anxious around people.

Juliet.

The last half of the last stanzas seems to be the best part in my opinion. The first parts read well although meanings went straight over my head. 'he's stammering HEY BABY, I don't know any of you anymore.' I liked these lines.

I really love this format. It's just lays the words out and moves quickly. Ah. The words. They're beautiful and abstract and yes, yes, they're bitter. To me at least. Love the ending.

Ah. The first line reminds me (horrifyingly enough, as the scene was quite frightening) of a clip from the movie Eternal Sunshine of a Spotless Mind. The rest of this brings to mind various scenes from Waking Life (what's with these movie references?). Aside from my cinematic allusions, though, I really feel drawn to this piece for purely aesthetic reasons. It flowed well with violin background music, in case you were wondering. The third stanza is my favorite. Very confused as a whole. Love this.

-salt.

very cool... i like the reptition & the last line... great poem

oh, how sad. it reminds me too much of my personal life... which is good, because it seethes with emotion and is complex yet accessible. love the alliteration and all the repetition. this whole poem just reeks of awkward situations and the structure fits it perfectly, which i mean as a good thing even though it might sound insulting, haha. loved your originality for describing simple things. makes the reader think and then smile once he's figured everything out. very nice write.

excuse me? what the hell? when did you get all these poems on here? how did i miss like 12 of them, what the hell is going on, honestly. I can't review this now, i just want to tell you how upset i am. GR ashley, no talking to me, but all this posting. I have to finish my novel review before i'm able to get hp, so i'll review this after im done. and signed in. but the lisp comment, ahahahah

Great use of assonance and beautiful diction.