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| akaCHEEKS 2008-07-20 ch 24,  | abusenice ending. i really liked it. it's touching. |
| x3life 2008-07-19 ch 24, | abuseaw this was so cute!! =) |
| abc 2008-07-18 ch 3, anon. | abuseI am sorry, but I can no longer continue reading this story. It is simply ridiculous to not capitalize the pronoun I and to write im instead of I'm. Furthermore, you string together multiple simple sentences continuously and it makes your work sound immature. Simple sentences can be strung together for an effect, but when the entire story is written in such a manner, that effect is lost and all that is left is lackluster writing. I think that perhaps your plot may have some promise, but your writing style needs work. Please, re-read your work and really consider how you can improve it. |
| aDATEwithAdream 2008-07-16 ch 24, | abusei am terribly sorry, but i want more. i dont want to make up my own ending, i want YOUR imagination on the screen before me to see them meet. god, i didnt even see the errors, except the tense and grammar, but the plot thing, wasn't even important. it kept me riveted and that's good enough for me. |
| oo 2008-07-14 ch 24, anon. | abuseworthy of a sequel... ? |
| oo 2008-07-14 ch 24, anon. | abusethat was good. im so happy there was a happy ending. im actually sort of tearing up right now from the endin so i cant say much else. i just liked it alot. |
| JusticeWriter 2008-07-12 ch 24, | abuseThis is a good story. It is SCReAMING for a sequel. *hint, hint* *wink, wink* *cough, cough* LOL. |
| Jayjack 2008-07-11 ch 24, | abuseawe that was surprisingly cute. happy endings. |
| Jayjack 2008-07-11 ch 12, | abusegod i hope she falls out of love. please. i feel so sorry for her. :'( |
| JackieQ 2008-07-02 ch 24, | abusegreat read. the ending was actually perfect. fit with the rest of the story very well. i do have a question though. in chapter 11, leo whispers something to her, but we never find out what it was...was that intentional? because i was thinking about that for a long time, and would so love to know what he said. it caused quite a reaction in her. |
| YoursMarilyn 2008-06-27 ch 24, | abusegood story. very intriguing but a bit repetitve. i really felt Leo's coldness throughout until the end. |
| Nikki 2008-06-14 ch 24, anon. | abuseThis story was really good. I loved the ending, way cute. It was perfect for this fic. I really am impressed. Ana was whiny, and obnoxious but then again she was perfectly human, and I suppose that's what matters. Amazing story. Kudos on a great read. THe one and only, Nikki P.S. don't ask why, but she sounded more like a Scarlet. |
| Gentle. Edge. 2008-06-09 ch 24, | abuseAw that was a cute ending. Your writing improved a bit throughout the story but it could still use a bit of improvement. Great plot though. Nice job :) |
| Gentle. Edge. 2008-06-09 ch 7, | abuseYou should really do more to show the differences in time. You have a tendency to go into random flashbacks and it's a bit unclear when you do it without warning. |
| Gentle. Edge. 2008-06-09 ch 1, | abuseThere are a few grammar mistakes but besides that it was pretty good. I felt so bad for the girl :( |