I can appreciate going to sleep alone, on the occasion it happens to the best of us, but I do have something of a proverbial bone to pick with your literary experiment.I give you this, as a first poem ever written this is actually enormously well structured, but as a poem it needs some work. Many of the rhymes are noticably forced. Your metaphors, such as "pit dark and deep" are perilously cliche. Meanwhile, the poem sports an unsure, inconstant rythm that makes the poem very difficult to read and understand. It's emotional, just needs cleanup.

Ok, I know it's poetry, but that doesn't mean we just ignore spelling and gramer. That, and sometimes people like to use rhyme schemes that are a bit more complex. You know, something that 3rd graders can't do.