 MorbidMan 2005-08-07 . chapter 1...Interesting, cuz.
This was an original, but improbable and almost implausible, situation. It'd seem harsher if you used such glorious words as "**." But I know you wouldn't do that... at least not yet.
It isn't really all that flowing, but that's not too much of a problem. This is because of its short length and interesting structure. All capitals and triple puncutation (which is a grammatical error that I will let slip). You forgot a question mark for the very last word.
On a scale of 1-10 I'd give it a seven. *thumbs up* |