Loved it!! I would absolutely LOVE to see a film about this! Have you ever considered writing a screenplay for it?

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you write beautifully :)

This was amazing! I love how now I can understand Adam more in-depth, understand his struggle. Poor, poor Adam. I just want to give him a hug...and clap Michael on the back for being a savior.

Excellant job!

Beautiful story, it felt so painful yet sweet. Great job.

Is Michael a real person? I'm afraid I don't watch much MTV, so I can't really say I'd know one way or another. I'd assume he's not, as this is an original fiction webpage, but I can't say for sure. ^_^

I love the ending, pensive, contemplative outlook Adam assumes at the end of the chapters. Deep things like that always get me, and I love that cliche comparison he made as well. ^_^

Good work! When I have more time, I'm definately going to have to read some of the other works... including Adam's other story. ^_^

So this chapter didn't move fast at all. ^_^ I like how Adam's slowly coming into realization of his new love, and then suddenly it REALLY hits him. I'm also glad you didn't just start him off as gigantically huge, as I've seen many authors do in the past. ^_^ Good job~!

I think perhaps the people in the confession booths should be writers. They, perhaps above all, hear EVERYTHING, outrageous to basic. With a bit of compassion and human understanding, I think they could write an awesome novel using what they've learned through their invisible booth.

That aside, I don't understand Adam's vague concern over Luka's death. Shouldn't he take it harder? It can't be so basic. Adam can't be so cold.

Of course, this isn't the Adam I saw in Superstar either.

I like the flow of this chapter, but I can't help hoping for some more, some different interaction with Luka. Certainly not details; just interaction, smiles and laughs and casual dates. I'd like to know him a bit more before, well... he dies.

Aside from that, I do love the pensive, wise outlook Adam takes on his life. I love how he criticizes what he's done, but doesn't outwardly regret it. In all, I do love his personality.

Oh boy. You make me want to write a story about prostitutes now. ^_^ I think Adam's reaction to everything is still a little vague but again, I'm sure that's merely your style. =D Although, the deal Seth made is very curious. What he's doing is surely illegal; I know that much. However, though Adam is beautiful, I find it strange that he simply arrives in LA and is almost immediately offered a job. Of course, it's your story, not mine, so I'm not permitted to complain. ^_^

Anyway, good work again!!

Well, Joseph was certainly short-lived. I kind of wish you'd have made this chapter longer, and a bit more detailed. I understand that vague seems to be Adam's forte, but to a reader I think it's a bit frustrating. MORE is the keyword to everything. ^_^

Aside from that, I can kind of feel Adam's life leaking from the pages... (computer haha) and I can sense his distortion. I like the present-past tense you're using; it's something I've always longed to use one day myself. ^_^ Good writing as always~

This chapter's moving a bit fast, but I suppose that's okay for this type of storyline. Anyway, I get both good and bad vibes from Joseph. I kinda like him, and at the same time I don't. I don't know. ^_^

Well, that's rather forward of Joseph. ^_^

I'm surprised at Adam's cutting. I can understand why he did it, but I've got to know... how did he even hear of it? Some kids are creative like that, but I wonder if he would have heard of such a thing in his world. It would be neat to have a scenario in this chapter where he hears about or sees someone cutting, and wonders about it. That would make his sudden action seem more realistic, I think. The way he's raised, I can't see him cutting...

Does Adam go to a Catholic school, or is this just a regular public school? I wonder if Sara is dating Joseph. If he's hitting on Adam so openly, I wouldn't think so; perhaps she's simply coming onto him.

I guess the only way to find out is to read on. Good writing, as I'll always say~!

I assume Adam will tell us later what happened to Mary? He didn't find any blood, so I think she choked or something of the sort... it's so weird. O_o

I like the writing style here, too. ^_^ I'm not a big fan of religion, so I pity Adam right now, and I wonder how things became as they are with him...

What a beautiful ending!;) And it ended just as it started, with the use of the word 'sorry'!;) This was a really, really beautiful story!^_^ I'm in love with Adam!;)