Is this a multi-part story or a chapter one? Seems like room to develop, but, also has a complete nature to it (except for the hair thing which pulls along a bit)

Nice story though, though lots of it is 'show not tell', (I know, tis annoying, isn't it?) All the same, I think this could have a much stronger dramatic touch if the past events were shown through scenes, flashbacks, or at least conversations. Thats really my ownly suggestion, but I think it would aid this story a bit.

Nice job, I look foward to more.Khenna

This is one mixed up story. I dont get it... Someone died? the main character? Don't EVER say :"in a feather like manner" again. This does VEX me! I guess the answer will come later with the significant cutting of the tresses.

Why do you always write sad stories?? No happy weddings or pink bunnies? But I'm not complaining...even if it is good...

One complaint: I think the way you worded it was confusing. All I know was that Jack died...he was murdered I suppose. You lacked a detailed and vividly clear picture on the first scene.

Nevertheless, I love this story already. You always seem to make characters very alive, very real.

I can't help but wonder...and this is strictly psychiatric...do you write stories involving dead loved ones because you have a deep, inner - maybe even unconscious - fear that your husband might die one day and leave you alone, grief-stricken and floundering?

I think your strongest point is the emotion you clearly emit. The raw agony, the aching loss, really gets to me.

Keep writing - I look forward to the next update!