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| sporkofdoom 2006-12-02 ch 1,  | abuseThis is so powerful, especially the last five lines, and the first two. The ending was fantastic, truly. Your metaphors are amazing. |
| not sure yet 2005-10-24 ch 1, | abusereally like the second line of this one, and the sudden change brought about that one liner in the middle and the last line is rather catchy as well, muchly enjoyable poem, tons of interesting imagery here, a bit craziness, and the title reminds me of nirvana, anywayz, muchly sweet poem, excellent job |
| The Melissa Occult 2005-08-09 ch 1, | abuseI liked it, you like metaphors, I like metaphors. I loved reading it. We still need to dance though. Sunlight only shines when at least half the world is awake. Sorry, random thought. I liked it, I could pick out different words and phrases that caught my attention, but I've been trying to get away from quoting the author of the story. Doesn't make much sense to say what's already been said. Your piece has probably been review countless times before by countless different people. Like my browser page I have up now that's incessently refreshing itself to fulfill some pyschotic robotic desire. But what can I say to add to the list of reviews that hasn't already been said. I'll think of something one of these times. I'd say something dark and nasty, I'm sure no one has said anything like that, but that would be mean. So I'll just say it was good and ride the flow of the stereotypical generic review.Good day my girl,S.P. |
| TJ Henri 2005-07-29 ch 1, | abuseWoulda shoulda coulda are words too dear to my heart to refuse being effusive about this. In your work I see kindred lust, all expressed in the same generation's voice. "We're not so different, you and I." It's funny how I look at "rain-soaked lips" through "never-were" and see my "Torrential" as it was: a lie, a dream brought on by chronic blindness.And I think you helped me close the book on a bad relationship turned cancerous. Now we are was too. |
| Nobody-n-Particular 2005-07-20 ch 1, | abuseThe imagery and manipulation of words in this is magnificent. Lovely. |
| addie pray 2005-07-20 ch 1, | abuseSuch fantastic imagery in this. The vocabulary and word use was great, as well. |
| smile persephone 2005-07-19 ch 1, | abuseThe first two stanzas are just jaw-dropping gorgeous. I just adore every line within them! I also just love 'white walls of a heart shaped asylum with cloister halls'. You are amazing. |
| Aslan Israel 2005-07-19 ch 1, | abuseA bit confusing, but I think I get it. Love the ending. |