 in theory 2005-11-20 . chapter 2Pretty, and your pen name interested me too. Nice work :) |
 David Stephen 2005-10-21 . chapter 8Wow - these poems are so heartfelt and I can tell they have come from the heart. You write with a lovely flare - continue! Thank you for my review for TRRT- it is very much appreciated! :) ~DS~ |
 teendramaqueen2005 2005-08-26 . chapter 8hey, these are really good! Keep up the great work |
 Katterree Fengari 2005-08-11 . chapter 7hmm...again the tone feels, I don't know, skewed. A little too much repitition on the "5 years" I think. But good rhythm. However, I have no idea what happened to the speaker. |
 Katterree Fengari 2005-08-11 . chapter 6um...oddly enough, it feels like you're telling the story from an outside perspective. Like, if you had it in third person instead of first, it would make sense.
I mean, the bitter "life made me this way" fits, but saying that "I have an...attititude" and "hoping/ that one day/ I will live" just feels like a conflicting tone to me. Psychologically, it doesn't make sense, I don't know...maybe if it were after-the-fact.
There's also some typos on the line "lite up m life" 'lit' and 'my' instead, I think.
I do like the repitition of "wishing/ hoping" that works well. |
 Lady Sakaki 2005-08-07 . chapter 3"is it right to wake up everyday and dread the sun?"
I love that line. |
 Lady Sakaki 2005-08-07 . chapter 2OH! very nice and descriptive. i liked it alot!! |
 DragonFaeLynn 2005-08-07 . chapter 8Beautiful work. |
 DragonFaeLynn 2005-08-07 . chapter 75 years is a long time. Maybe something really great will change your life in the future and you'll go back to being happy and carefree. |
 DragonFaeLynn 2005-08-07 . chapter 6Yep, I go through that every single day.
It's definitely a trip. |
 DragonFaeLynn 2005-08-07 . chapter 5I guess you just have to make yourself open up to people. I have to. It's really hard, but sometimes, it can make life a lot easier. |
 DragonFaeLynn 2005-08-07 . chapter 4Hmm... Yeah... Life's a **. |
 DragonFaeLynn 2005-08-07 . chapter 3That. Is. Exactly. How. I. Feel.
Enough said.
Awesome poem |
 DragonFaeLynn 2005-08-07 . chapter 2Cute. I like it. |
 Lady Sakaki 2005-08-02 . chapter 1P.S. "the prophecy" sounds cool!! |