this is really good. Dark..and touching. Sounds like the guy has a really one sided choice to it..even though most of the stuff he does is bad

~Sorrow~

I love the intense build-up, fantabulous work.

ah, splendid rhyming toward the end made me want to rhyme more often. the poem, is exactly how I felt the past few days which it really perfects. gorgeous poem.

~* noelle

quite compelling.the insides do really count.

oh i felt like this a while ago, and now i am over the person, but everyone just keeps loving and loving.but if i do gander, there is less and more to see.oh woe love.

I like the rhyming towards the end. It really emphasizes your points.