Having read through several of your works, I want to commend you for you great ideas, and attention to detail. These are what make a story interesting.

Unfortunately, the stories' potential for excellence is marred by typos, grammatical hiccups, and uncoordinated words. It appears that English may not be your first language as many sentences seem to be direct translations thus, the ungainliness of the sentences. Too many bombastic words overwhelm a story's simple beauty - in some cases, a similar sounding but totally different (not referring to homophones) word has been inadvertently used, rendering the tale a little ludicrous.

Okey-dokey, here I am, trying desperately to catch up on all the reviews I've recieved while away!

So, a nice continuation of the first chapter! However, one big thing I'd nitpick at from the start:

"...her childhood VC's (Virtual Classes)."

Well, other then the fact that there should be no apostraphe in VCs, I'd strongly recommend against writing (Virtual Classes) as you did. Just write "...her childhood Virtual Classes.", and then whenever it comes up next time (hopefully soon) write VCs, like how you did it with DC. That way, the reader will understand what VC is, but it won't be so obvious. Same with OGs.

Second, this sentence (third paragraph) seems a bit awkward. You might want to think about rephrasing it:

"This always flustered the child with the disgust across their face considering she would then have to answer and thinking was something she obviously didn’t like doing."

There're a few other sentences that seem borderline run-on, too, but the main thing I might say is that the bottom half of this chapter comes across a bit too much like an information dump before moving on to the main plot. Um...maybe space out all this info throughout other chapters?

Overall, though--nice continuation; well done!

Very interesting...

I bet it's difficult for you to write futuristic stories, huh? You have to get all the facts straight and everything...you got a lot of it right, but I still think you might want to explain things a little bit better.

Good story...can't wait for more.

Sorry it took me so long to review!

Anywho, great so far. The plot is really interesting...

But, like all futuristic sci-fi plots, it has the same problem - you don't explain things deeply enough. Description of surroundings - colors, temperatures, whatever - is the key essential to a story like this.

Kudos to you! Can't wait for more, and see what happens when they reach Earth.

Hmm, I'd never have known this was a first attempt at futuristic writing...well-done!

M...okay, well, onto CCs, since I love handing out those:

“Ma’am, we can’t keep the others waiting. I need your pass,” shaken from the horrendous memories--the comma after pass should be a period, and 'shaken' should be capitalized.

You've got a few minor 'misplaced' words--words that are missing a letter so that they become a different word (they becomes the, etc).

She moves from crying to smiling -awfully- quickly; it doesn't seem to go hand in hand. Actually, she's still crying with grief when she starts smiling (at least the way it's currently written)...perhaps you might want to change this around a bit to make more sense.

All in all, though, well done!

Oh, I inspired this? I'm touched...because this is one of my favorites of yours. Thank you.

As for the actual story...it was sad, emotional, but you did, I suppose, give it a happy ending - and I think the name Angelique is beautiful.

You did a striking job with this.