I love it. the style reminds me of "A Tale of Endless Sorrow" (the title escapes me at this time. sorry a thousand times if its wrong!). I love it. the style is just so wonderful and provoking. just sends delightful shivers up and down my spine. gorgeous.
This is really nice, although I found it quite hard to read in places - even so I like how you've arranged it, it's more original than breaking the lines down and leaving ever word that rhymes at the end of each line...