Interesting comparison between the lies and lights, you have created a sort of wordplay here, which is really fitting. Lovely use of imagery, once again!keep up the good work!xo - Acrobia

Nice small piece, I like the images you've created with the moon and the repetition. Keep up the good work!xo - Acrobia

A tale in a poem... wonderful. Reminds me a bit about titanic or a teen movie where the lead chick is broken because her lead dude was caught kissing the supporting actress chick, who in realtiy is nothing more than a bimbo. Anyways. I enjoyed it. Not my favorite of yours, but I did like the story behind it. A heartache with moving on. Good.

I know this feeling, and I despise it, loathe it, wish to break it into little pieces of nothing and throw it into the flames... I love a relatable poem, espcially when there is one that totally hits you the right way. Dark and true to nature.

I really like the way this poem is organized, the way in the beggining all lines are together and then how they space out, perhaps representing how the character wishes her problems would disperse? I noticed though some repetition that I felt did not fit, for example: "I’m going insane/I can't stay sane" both lines mean the same thing, and it makes the writting less strong in this case. And also, when you write: "I’m on my knees/And saying please" may I suggest -"I'm on my knees/asking, please".Other than that, wonderful imagery and great lines. Keep up the good work!xo - Acrobia

A strong and defying piece, I like the way the contradictions work within the poem, once again creating a rymth. I really liked the images you've created here, such as "mind full of fears" and "pools of innocence" - they really fit the poem. Good job!xo - Acrobia

Aw, this poem was filled with feeling. I like the rymth it holds as it keeps going, as well as the word choice and rhyme. Keep up the good work!xo - Acrobia

Incredible use of words here, I love the rhyme scheme and the way everything fits together. I was a little confused, however, at the way you use the word "refute", as I know it to mean in contradiction to, or contradicting. A wonderfull poem.xo - Acrobia

Bitter and sad... I hate the feeling of being used by someone for mere sexual gratification on their part. You feel your life is being taken from you... a piece of your soul went with it. Beautiful write.. yet so heart-wrenching.

I wonder these same things after I have an argument with someone and my tongue cant hold itself. Nice flow.

~[Sarcastic pricks/She knew to well] *too.

I like this version better. But I think it should end at "She'll fall into the endless depths". I don't know why.

Lmfao. The end lines are corny. It would be good with those omitted.

And hey, as for the structure of the poem, I think it should be arranged in a boxy form. Left-aligned, maybe ten words a line. Even if the rhyme scheme is broken, people will -read- it the same exact way. Especially without punctuation, it'll be a continues stream of boxed insanity. You get what I mean?

If you want, I could show it to you sometime, just ask. It'll be awesome.

E! This one is cool. This one would looked better left-aligned.

[i want to live the pain,/i want to hit the floor,/in a puddle of blood,/and scream for more,/i like the pain,/i can't wait to feel,/the blood ooze down,/way down to my heels,/in my sick dimension,] I don't like this.

I like the structure of this poem. It really -does- look like a knife. The length is so suiting.

[To my sadness, I try to realize ‘we’ don’t exist,] = How sad!