Wow. Very emotion filled poem. I love how the feelings creep out slowly then consume you. Fantastic.

it gave me a chuckle about it being inspired partly by the prince song, my friend is just a big joke with him and stuff, sorry bout that.

so anyway, i like the concept, someone on a bus, just so interesting.

improvs are just so hard to be, what you really want.

I can relate so closly to this, its really refreshing to read such a work by you, and also that the poem is comediac. a nice, nice way of conveying it and had me giggling like mad at certain points. wondeful.

~* noelle

Very cool. The format was very interesting.

That was -awesome-, Lav'! I feel so lucky. I went to check out those Just In stories and came across your poem! I'm still amazed at your structure, how you use every literature technique to your advantage. It's overwhelming- brackets, italicization, bolding, punctuation, line seperation and indentation.. These must be painstaking to write; I can't imagine where it comes from.

Hm.. Your red-circles reminded me of something-- nothing literature-wise, but it was on a tangent, having to do with a custom in my family.. But I can't remember.

I'd copy and paste my favorite lines, but I'd have to take -whole chunks-, that's how solid this poem is. So solid, I still can't complain. ~_~

Thank you for the good read, Lavender Hail.

wow. you have no idea how closely i can relate...love it. it has so much want circulating through its words, its almost intoxicating, and the format just adds to that.

Strikes close to one's heart, a chord lingering in the stillness.