Aw... everybody else reviewed before I could...

Down to brass tacks.

"She was halfway thorough building a fire in the kitchen"... - 'thorough' oughta be 'through'. :P

"You are the only one allowed in my mind." - no complaints, just, um,... heh heh. Anybody else reading this is likely not going to understand my point here. :P

Awesome! She has her memory back! Hmm, this is shaping up to be very very interesting indeed. :P

Good stuff and keep at it! Nobody is allowed to be a slower writer then me, so you better update soon!

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Well, you're right next to me, so there's no reaction you haven't seen and/or heard...

But somehow I think something's going on we as readers don't know about, and that's sort of bugging me.

Okay, not sort of. IT IS.

BB- Arej

Shame, I was kinda looking forward to a chapter or so where Fomal thinks she is a Hunter. Oh well, this was still a great chapter, and I wonder why Bruce cares about her.

Okay, saw your reviews on NE. Thanks for reviewing. Strange intro here, but your story does show some potential.

GREAT!

I loved it, really excellent start! Continue!

There is one thing I oughta say: you used 'can not' a lot. I don't know if one way is better then another, but maybe 'cannot' would, I dunno, be better? Again, I dunno if it's more proper grammer then the other...

But my original thought stands. This was great. :D I hope you start posting the other made-over chapters soon.

Okay, you. Short. Extremely so.

*I read this offline, so I get the basics and yadda blah and I know the plot (parts) and some of what happens next, so this is a rant*

WRITE MORE!!

BB- Arej

That *bleep*! How can he do that to his own sister? Oh, wait, I know! He's a sociopath, isn't he? Probrably...that would explain it...Anyway I've been meaning to read your stuff as soon as I found out...there was stuff here to read ^-^;... I'd kind of like to know what's going on, but I'm sure that'll come up in future chapters so no real worries there. I'd be a pain and point out things that bothered me (grammatically), but since I'm so terrible at prose I don't really feel I have the right to. And...I think that's it for now. Oh, the chapter was really short. NOW that's all I have to say.For now.Dun dun DUN!~Aurs

Oh this was *really* good. It's the best-written, in terms of style, of all your stories, and the plot promises to be excellent. You must update soon.