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| from beneath the bell jar 2007-02-12 ch 2,  | abuseOh I love this bit. It's so twisted and perfect. How original as well. |
| Boadicia 2006-01-23 ch 2, | abuseAwesome, awesome, awesome. This could have worked as a story, but somehow, as a poem it is infinitely better. The '& amy being amy' line is great, as is the ending, which caught me completely by surprise. |
| Haberdasher 2005-10-02 ch 3, | abuseand the last one...excellent. such original phrases. so interesting and lingering. i like the sound of this girl, terrible and wonderful all at once.- the Lady Elaine |
| Haberdasher 2005-10-02 ch 2, | abusewow, im impressed once again! great, i liked the people amy became were entralling. inspired. very visual. -the Lady Elaine |
| Haberdasher 2005-10-02 ch 1, | abusecrazy, and intense. 'time is rubber' fantastic line. and such supernatural (almost) imagery. -the Lady Elaine |
| Eva 2005-09-13 ch 3, anon. | abuseI liked the way you handled and linked all three poems...the content didn't seem lethargic through your representations, though I must say you seem more comfortable nad skilled at rhyming verse (they being an avenue for your eloquencewitfurore) Yours,Anon |
| FELICIA-SPENCER 2005-08-30 ch 1, | abuseThis is so whimisical and poetic. I just love your use of words. Anyway, I loved this one. Keep up the great work. |
| Manuel Fajar 2005-08-07 ch 1, | abuseChrysalis cannot speak of beauty,— It only knows of change, A calculus surreal of movement,— Enthralls her every day, Unfolding her long wings through tissue,— That seems a spiderweb, Inevitable daring struggle,— Pulsating with new life, So soon with iridescent foldings,— She'll flutter through blue sky, A joy that all can clear perceive then,— A monarch butterfly. |
| Aimee Raven 2005-08-05 ch 3, | abuseVery ethereal...befitting for a dream sequence, lol. Your poetry astounds me...you always add this great twist in the end that changes the overall meaning and it's simply fantastic!! Keep writing! Love, Mia |
| Aimee Raven 2005-08-05 ch 2, | abuseAw...creepy story, but excellently well told! It's just the end that makes me frown..."& amy being amy" hehe, fun stuff! Love, Mia |
| Aimee Raven 2005-08-05 ch 1, | abuseArgh, I was sure I reviewed this...brilliant brilliant! the 'queen' parts make me think of Queen Mab, and the bouncing back in time, all the metaphores are just amazing...you have an awesome gift girl! Love, Mia |
| addie pray 2005-08-05 ch 3, | abuseGod. These are all so insane and they remind me of dreams I have all the times. Gorgeous. All of them. This one (chapter three) is my favourite. Brilliant. |
| moonarised polane 2005-08-01 ch 3, | abuseaddiction is powerful and scary. and i like the song-like quality of this piece. =] the last two lines were my favourite. |
| moonarised polane 2005-08-01 ch 2, | abusehaha. i like the 'storyline' thingum in this. the ending was nice. but i liked the previous one better. =] love the descriptions and yes, its comp studs now. |
| rei 2005-07-30 ch 3, anon. | abuseOOH i love this one the most it was so uh. enthralling? whatever i have no big words.i like i like i like |