most of all, i love that the ending wasn't happy.
it wasn't tragic, it was very hopeful.
but it still wasn't happy or cliched.
i'll have to check to see if you continued
on anymore with brandon and ruby.
but as for now, favoritefavoritefavorite.

i know there's still one last chapter left..
but i just needed to tell you that i loved it.
i love that brandon fixed everything before he left
i love that ruby was finally happy with herself.
i love that brandon moved on.
i hope that ruby will do the same.

that. is possibly the best scene i've ever read.
totally heartbreaking and amazing.

you wrote that.
amazing.

"There'd been boys with uncaring hands, ashtray mouths and brutal pick-up lines."
awesome.

wow. i really expected him to go back to her.
but he...didn't.
way to throw curve balls.

he will be. but not for you, dearie.
even though he'll go back to her...
but that's not the point.

i guess i don't even know if brandon knows about the baby yet.
hmm, that will be interesting.

(sorry for these useless reviews...
i just love jacking review counts.)

yes, yes she does need him.

i don't like ruby.
i do like brandon.
therefore, go brandon!

i love the short prose-like quality of the chapters.
and the poetic principles you're tying into this.
very very nice. :)

Wow. =P I expected a happy ending, i guess not. for a short story like this, this is pretty good! =O

i think i'm going to cry

Wow. I haven't been on in a while, and I guess I missed this, which was stupid because i've been enjoying this particular story for quite some time. The ending is unsatisfactory, but fitting, and by unsatisfactory i mean i didn't want it to end there even though it should have.

"Since when did Brandon perform in public?"

Beautiful.

Although I think there should be a sequel. I want to know what ahppens to Ruby.

For some reason, I really love the picking strawberries part. I also love the line "I barely had time to destroy myself." It's just... twisted perfection. Like this whole piece, really. Huh... I really didn't think this would be her reaction. But I like it. Sad, but really true to life. I'm so happy this isn't going to be the last of them! Keep up the awesome work.

Wow... I love the way he seems so removed from it, that he's really moved on from her but then you hit it with a line like- "Of course, sometimes I still laid on my roof tiles at night, looking up into the inky sky as the icy midnight air drenched through me, and waited for her drunken phone calls which never came." It makes me sad to read the last lines... I can't wait to find out what she thinks about this. Awesome work, I really missed this story!