I think my favourite part of this is in the beginning: when you finish each sentence with the teen's thought 'is this it'. You do it quite fluidly, and the repetition gives the entire short piece a sense of rhythm, which is great. Well done!

i love it, it's beautiful.

personally, in the bak of my head. i'll ask myself if this is it. then i brood over a unaccomplished life. but just the little things come and i know there's hope.

this story gives me hope. i think it's one of my favourites on fictionpress.

EB