Pretty good. I think that it would help if you gave some more background on exactly what's happening and why. Also, perhaps, a more definite telling of how old they are. I am very proud of you. SECOND CHAPTER FINALLY, YEAH! This is a memorable day. I shall mark it on the calendar as the day you wrote more then one chapter in a story and made my very happy! Well, maybe that’s to long… anyhow, congratulations. Can’t wait for chapter three! (Which better be posted soon! :)

Aw! Thank you! How sweet! He, he! Awesome as always! Are you going to finish this one? You are SO good at starting stories, you just don't seem to be able to finish them. : ) You know, your stories may be unfinished, but they are definitely NOT horrible! May real name isn't all that special, ya know. I just like Translucently Opaque better. Thanks for your review on Telrúnya. I know, I have names like Telrúnya, Aralyn, Amorellstra, Umenelnána, Ariathnyn and then... TIM! My Dad's name is Tim to that was kinda a tribute to him, but it is also reminiscent of Mont Python and the Holy Grail. Go watch it and you’ll know what I mean. Anyhow, great story, FINISH IT for once! I’ll be back looking for the next chapter! : )

Wowie. I normally don't like sci-fi, but I like this a lot.