broken and wierd with a huge vocabulary, but rings in my head like a rap somg. i like it

I love the word combinations you have used. I think my favorite is "Hollow effervescence". I'm not really sure what the message was, but the words and images are vivid. Keep up the good work.

scattered and fragmented is cool an all but u might want to make it so some one can makes Some sense of it..mebs a better title that gives a hint of what the peom is kinda bout..but then again poetry is poetry..theres no such thing as being wrong :)

Dude... what the heck was that supposed to be?