Nice ending. Nice imagery and description. Thanks for the review.

you have a very unique style of writing. I can't really describe but... it's like you find the perfect words and set them up perfectly so that it carries a very powerful effect.

you're very talented. ^^ write on!

Very interesting. One mistake: 'there is o use running away' should be 'no use'. Good imagery. I like the three lines beginning 'my own will'. Last line adds an effective ending.

Ps. If you have time it would be great if you could review some of my stuff to!