wow this is powerful! great job!

i'm in LOVE with this because i can relate to this right now.

This poem goes straight to the heart

Would he "give a **" if he was doing all those things for her? It obviously requires an investment of time on his part. Just a thought...

It was good. A little to pseudo-angsty...

I love this. The emotion is so powerful. It's true, you know. Material things mean nothing if there is no sincerity - true feeling - behind them.

I enjoy this because it is slightly angry and hey, anger is fun in poetry. And this definitely gets the point across in plain, simple words without loosing the flow and the original intention.

Good Times, friend. Good Times.

wow! great poem. love the toughness in this and the simple, hard ending. totally agree of course. touching, well done:-)

oh - interesting. hm 'wants and needs', i really like that first line... no wait i liked the whole thing, it's very touching.

EB