The structure works very well, and I like the confused mixture of passion and hatred. Despite the emotional pain, it still has an almost erotic feel to it.

Matt

Wow. Awesome stuff. Short and to the point, which is sometimes a good thing to do, in this case it was a good thing to do. It flows job.

Don't be sorry! The choppiness is a great effect. Beautiful! I hope this isn't true. It's so heart wrentching...

THIS IS NOT CHOPPY IN ANY WAY...ilove it...*pops raison into mouth*

Hey, as the last reviewer said, the chopyness is actually really good in this poem!

i actually think the choppiness works well for this poem and what it stands for. I like it, good work.

Wow, I liked this one. Yeah, I wrote a Hate poem too...