"Why does my heart _ feelings I can't fight. You're free to leave me but please don't decieve me. And please believe me when I say I love you." Moulin Rouge will rock your world.

I like the way you worded everything, you got the point across really well.

Wow, I'm impressed. I loved the contrast between peace and hatred at the beginning, like 'screaming' and 'brightly'. Full of that wonderful emotion that I still have yet to learn how to capture..

Ps. If you have time it would be great if you could review some of my stuff too!