Hey girl! How's Turkey~??

I'm so glad you revised the opening for Dusman! This is SO much better!! Very clever, although a few things were too much (didn't need to say "they were in deep **"). There were also a few misspellings, but I won't be picky about that. For some reason, I feel compelled to tell you to change "they got saved" to "they were saved". I also liked "A round world sure rolls the wrong way." and the phrase "quite an acceptable amount of years." Hehe.

This still needs some revision (you used the word "vision" instead of "envision" in one part, and some other bits didn't make sense to me) but it's so much better~~ I can't tell you how much more I enjoyed this (and I did love the original Dusman)!

Hope you update when you get back ^_^

Interesting little story, if a bit too short. And true, humans always think they're superior. Not only that, we're arrogant as well.

Good piece. *_*

isn't it true. you put the meaning in mean for how humans are...great work!

~Sorrow~